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Poetry is not a competition
to see whose voice can out-bellow
all others.

It is not the mock elevation of baristas,
waitresses, and coffee girls.

It is not referring to grown ass women as girls.

Poetry is not performance.
It is not the trapeze.
Not the spotlight, limelight,
or a long, harrowing limo ride.

It is not an intricate courting dance.
Not the irridescence of peacock tails
parading by.

Poetry is not a cockfight.
It's not a dating service for the pretentious
and absurd.

Poetry will not stop war.
Will not feed the hungry.
Will not build homes from shoddy rhyme schemes.

Poetry will not score you any points
for the afterlife, nor with women.
If you are an asshole, no stack of verse
will hide that fact. Poetry in its artifice
will not deliver to you a happily ever after.
It will not glue your marriage.
It will not shield you from his drunken
misogynist fist. Even if he writes poetry.

Poetry is not an elixir or a tool.

It is decorative, like sheer linen curtains,
and that is all.
Should explain why I don't participate in the amateurish poetry scene anymore.
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WhirlwindTortoise Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2013
Poetry, like the other artforms isn't direct, but I disagree that it's meaningless, or just 'decorative', it can affect people in a variety of different ways, as can any artform. Sure, it can be pretentious sometimes, depending on who is writing, but it can affect the author and reader both. I wouldn't reduce it to a decoration, even if it can be one. Sometimes, a bit of poetry, music, theatre, paintings, etc can really hit the nail on the head for people and inspire, or help them.
mewichigokaranatiger Featured By Owner May 12, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
i am a beginig poet can you read this one <[link]> and tell me what you think and yours was amazing
touchmyoathkeeper Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2012  Student Writer
I really enjoyed this. Especially the first stanza. :]
JasonFaria Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Completely disagree, sorry :/
Devyt Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2011
I see where you're coming from, but in that you perceive poetry as essentially meaningess beyond aesthetics, I disagree. Poetry is an art, a fragment of your thoughts caught and preserved in their power. Given proper circumstances, a poem may just change the world.
macrowell Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2011
F-Yeah way to tell it like it is... but i disagree
macrowell Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2011
Let me be a little more specific. If the goal isn't ultimately to have at least a small part in changing the world (no matter how minute it is) then whats the point of showing it to the world. To complain? to ruin people's day? all i'm saying is I appreciate the enthusiasm but art for art's sake sounds both kitchie and selfish to me. Maybe it's just me
SheIsRawring Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
.... WOW!!!
That is good!
starykid Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
I agree; to a point.
I do agree that poetry isn't REALLY going to change people, or save someone, or stop world hunger.
But I think it CAN have a meaning, and I must say that I write for myself; letting out my own thoughts (though I don't write falsely, I write whats on my mind). So I think there's still a purpose and a meaning.
However, I must admit I've read many a false poem (mostly on love, a topic I steer clear of)
CosmoWillome Featured By Owner May 10, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
AhhTheHorror Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Huzzah! I love it!
Otaku-of-Michigan13 Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2011
By the way, may I feature this in my new group, Casual Poetry? The meaning is beautiful. :D
Otaku-of-Michigan13 Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2011
...And poetry sometimes has a meaning. But I agree. It's not really there for much.
ChibiNaruto666 Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2010
very true i like this piece i would like to feature this in my group join if you like
AprilxMayxJune Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2010  Student General Artist
You're an excellent reality check. Line through line, I thought of all the "poets" I know and how much they cease to inspire me. In every stanza, you've described every sort of "bad" poet I've met.

"Poetry is not a competition
to see whose voice can out-bellow
all others."

^ I think of all the ditzy little romantics who use words like "azure" and describe roses in all shapes and forms. They go on about a loved one until their love loses sincerity and sense. You've inspired all the proud and hot headed who look down on me for using simpler terms.
“It is not the mock elevation of baristas,
waitresses, and coffee girls.”

^All of those sour stares as I pass by a Starbucks… Whether they’re waiting a table or taking advantage of the attention and free Wi-Fi, they think they’re flawless jewels.

This poem is one of the few to inspire me, or rather, proverbially slap me in the face. By the last line, I can tell that poetry is not defined by the poets, but the art itself. It’s simple to the point that people make it difficult or even abuse it. I hope I never become part of the "amateurish poetry scene" though I'm still young.
fireflycatcher Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2010
let all of those things be poetry and find a new word for what comes out of your honesty. I don't make poetry but they are kin.

but I do agree with the feeling
ToxicImmobilizer Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2010
I like it, I agree with most of it, and the message was great.
Madison-Cali Featured By Owner May 30, 2009
I just joined DA and just saw the literature section. I really enjoyed your piece. Very insightful.
bobdole8006 Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2009
Finally someone understands. Poetry is however, an explanation of one's feelings toward a subject, such as love, hate anger rage, jealousy, what have you, and that's what makes it beautiful. It shows who the writer is! That's why I am a poet, because without it, no one would understand who i am!
WilliamLemley Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2009
This is like the anti-Ares Poetica.
EvanescentArtist24 Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2009  Student General Artist
isn't this poetry?
colorsfearmyarmy Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2008
i think poetry is more than a decrotive (object) And i find it a exlir it cleans my mind of all that rottens it and allows me to find a place at where i can sleep in peace. But thats just my opionion but you defitily had a good consertration on and it was well written good work.
Destruction-Alure Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2008
If nothing else, very well written.
incandescent-silence Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2008
I went back and thought about it...and realised that when you write something, you don't have to write it from your own point of view; you can write perfectly well from another person's standpoint. So it was unfair for me to criticise your views based on what you've written here, and I apologise for that, because all in all this is a great poem; I just didn't agree with it. And I guess that's something the rest of us should keep in mind as well: look at the poem, without immediately assuming that it reflects something about the author.
Dontpretendtoknow Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2008
By the way if you want your poem to sound better and talk to the people you're really targeting,
you should write it like the script for a commercial. And have the voice dubbed as Mr. Moviephone.

you're very interested in the "stereotypes" my friend. well, i'm just going to have to go ahead and say you fit in with a lot of the stereotypes around you. probably similar clothing, sunglasses, hats? hmm, well, we're all the same. and this piece just makes it sound like you're making conversation with the idiots who ruined your own image of yourself.
Dontpretendtoknow Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2008
"Poetry in its artifice
will not deliver to you a happily ever after."

oh contraire, my child.

Poetry is what brought you the very idea...
Scammarone Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2008
I like it, except for the end. I always though poetry was a way of dealing with life that sometimes was attractive but not always. Sometimes it can be a riddle, etc.

You should fully do a piece on what poetry is... lol.
Anarchrox Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2008
I have rather found that poetry is an outlet for one's own thoughts penned in a way one can best explain how they feel.
archmagesynok Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2008
Decoritive poetry is the kind of poetry that should not exsist in my opinion. For me, poetry is nothing more than a release, so I don't explode and leave little chunks of me about the place, it keeps me sane, and that is all. If people wish to read my stuff, go for it, but I do not require my poetry to be read. I definitly agree most people write (especially poetry) for the wrong reasons, and agree with much of what you said. Nice poem.
A-Name Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2008   Writer
Wow uv hit the nail on the head. i totally agree. gr8 work. dis is a defo fave of mine.
ChellieBelle Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2008   Writer
this is well written, but pessimistic in my eyes.

why cant poetry "be a performance"? i have seen people perform their poetry, not like a play, but just how they move and react to the words. i find it to put more emphasis in what they are speaking.

no poetry cannot feed an empty stomach but perhaps a poem written could inspire someone to do so...?

but again, i am not trying to ciritcize. i am just stating my point of view. it is very well written.
DewLeaf Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2008
I liked the feeling that went into this~
FinneganMacCool Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2008
Excellent, much of what i wanted to sya put to simple, streamlined verse. Bee-utiful
Flaw66 Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2008
For me poetry is more than decorative .. its a window to the persons soul .. you learn their heart through this and it helps you look at things differently and to inspire them who look at their work with an interest to better themselves as writers, and open themselves to a better understanding of that artist and their life ... poetry is so much more than just a curtain covering a bare window... I feel like this is an insult to poets who strive to inspire others as well because without it they may have never been heard.
Deltabeta Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2008
I just have one thing to say. Amen!... Read my poem called..."How do you feel now." It has the same theme. I posted it a long time ago too. Thats amazing that we have some of the same feelings.
mikoverzon Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2007
Nice poem you got here! :D In my opinion, poem is a way to express your feeling. What you feel during the day or days you write your poem. :D Would you mind commenting on my poems? I'm just an amateur writer. Thanks! :D
mynameislin Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2007
You seem to be extremely cynical. your poem however, is wonderful. i understand where you are coming from, but would you consider those people poets?
Chibi-Hitokiri Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2007
O.O Very good!
Shards-of-memorie Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2007
Great work, very well put together, and i like how you tell us exactly the limits of poetry and its worth

Great stuff
BlindxChild Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2007
poetry is an elixir to me
it's like a release of my mind

i would say...who cares if they see and act of it that's the way some people are

you shouldn't let it stop you, unless you're really pissed off
i want to see how your poetry is like
myunhappiness Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2007
ok. i think this poem is lovely. some of it i understand and agree with, some of it i don't.
the last two lines, "It is decorative, like sheer linen curtains,and that is all." I dissagree with. Many times i have been so upset, ready to flip tables and smash things. One of the only ways I can release my anger is through scribbling illedgible poetry on a page or throwing unbreakable waterbottles at my wall. (that made a big hole, let me tell u.)
i kind of get what you are saying, but if that is all you think poetry is, then I feel sad that you never got to experience the healing powers of poetry. I know this sounds corny, but this is true.
sometimes too, you feel good about yourself when you are able to write a poem and it actually makes sense and sounds good. my sister gets compliments almost everyday on her ability to memmorise poetry and write her own.
I believe poetry is decorative, like you said, but it is much, much more. as an example, "In Flanders Fields" is such a well known poem. it really touches many people and i'm sure most who have been in war can relate to this in some way, heck, i can relate to this!!! anyway, i got a little off topic.
I think your poem is really well put, and I think your opinion is very strong and it is an interesting point you have made. good job! :clap:
HisOnly Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2007
I like it, in a sense it shows what most people feel when they write. But also, it shows what some people think are what they are writting for. Like writing for them, means fixing their lives. When it's not. I agree completely that it is something just to "decorate" your life with. Sometimes though, what you write is so much more. It may not hide the fact that bad things are going on, or make you a professional at writing. Nothing can, but it may allowed you get your thoughts out and given someone the chance to know they aren't the only one feeling that way. I am sorry that you feel that this defines amaturish scenes, as you put it. I may have gotten the wrong idea, if I have, I am sorry. I realize that some people aren't as experienced as others in writting, but correct me if I'm wrong, everyone has to start somewhere. I do understand that some people only write, so they can use it as something to "show off". But others don't, either way, that doesn't technically make them an amature or a "professional" if you may.

I'm sorry if I was rude or mean in any way. I just thought I would be honest.

Tabitha Joi'
Cathori Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2007
No, I think there's something else in poetry. Nothing of worth, I can agree with every line but the last . . . Maybe Poetry is also saying what you need to say, now that it doesn't matter anymore.

But anyway, that wasn't my point. My point was, this is a great poem and I think I have a huge problem with doing exactly what your piece calls out so elegantly and viciously. So how do I stop? How do I put aside all the arrogance and ego that go along with pointless academia and get rid of the superiority complex?

I mean, I'm willing to admit it, my poetry absolutely blows, and for many of the reasons that you're now dismissing it. So you've named the disease, have you got a treatment plan for wanna-be poet pretension?
Dreamsofmercy Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2007
This piece is very well put together. I find the topic to be head on. I think we've all dealt with that egotistical scumbag who parades about pretending to be an artist for his own gain.

The structure worked nicely here. The lack of rhyme and use of vocabulary accented this perfectly.

From beginning to end this piece had me hooked and I wish more people would read it and get the message.
incandescent-silence Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2007
I like a lot of the points you made, although I may not agree with most of them (there is no "good art" and "bad art", no different levels of art, but just art - if the message is there and makes sense it doesn't matter so much how it is written), but may I presume enough to make some corrections? (The structure, etc. of the poem have already been commented on above, and since I agree I'll leave those out.)

//It will not shield you from his drunken
misogynist fist. Even if he writes poetry.//

I think it would be better to change "misogynist" to "misogynistic", because, after all, it's an adjective. And the break before "even" seems to just break the flow of the line. Gives me an uncomfortable feeling, like something isn't quite finished at that point. But maybe that's your intention; I'm not good at Literature, only grammar. However, that's the feeling I get more or less throughout the poem, so I suppose the phrasing might be improved.

I like this, though. But one thing I don't get is the part where you say that poetry is not an elixir or a tool. Concerning the part about elixir - who ever said that it was? And the part about it being a tool - oftentimes, it is. Poetry may not be able to change the physical substance of things, but it inspires others. It can change the minds of people. That makes it a very potent force. Granted, it may not change the reality of a natural disaster, or of poverty, or the reality of there being slavery and prostitution still present in this world. But it can inspire people to take action, to relieve the suffering of those in famine regions, to donate to charities for the disabled, and to change their views on social issues eg. homosexuality. So I don't believe one can honestly say that it is not a tool.

One thing I don't like about most of your points in the poem is that I'm not sure all those presumably pretentious, amateur writers out there really believe that it is an elixir, or a parade, or a facade that they can hide behind. Maybe some do, but most of the people I know write poetry only when they really mean it. We don't see it as performance, only as art - hence "decorative". We don't write to show off, we write when we have the inspiration, we write when we think we have a point to put across. Which is what you're doing, but perhaps you should consider your points more carefully.

I suppose it's just me, since everyone else seems to love it, but, if you wanted my honest opinion, well, I know that I personally don't write very well, but this certainly isn't one of the best pieces I've seen.

But I still like it (even though it sounds like you're insulting me and all the other people I know so far who write poetry).
Dontpretendtoknow Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2008
i know you're not trying to start a fight, but to say that a lot of this person's ideas are unfounded. there are people out there who understand what you're trying to say. and i think you're right in a lot of ways.
out-on-a-limb Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2007  Hobbyist Photographer
My point exactly! So true, I love the second to the last line
saintslove Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2007  Professional Writer
I like alot of the points you make in this.
SanJuanFawn Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2007   Writer
the "out-bellow" was the first great indication that i would enjoy reading all the way through...
the description with peacock feathers was a perfect visual for how this poems reads
Jdart21 Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2007
wow u have a lot of comments and u seem like a really experienced writer. i like the conviction in your words i can almost hear the bitter disappointment. your imagery is somethin else. i'm a novice writer and i'm not really doing it for a community its what i like to do and i hope i get better at it maybe even as good as you. i have no other motives but i can understand where u come from becus i've met ppl like you describe but you should write if u love it not becus people like it or dont the world will go on doing what it likes and so should you just my opinion it really was great tho
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